nice. three as's in para 2 and para 3.short stories are great. a different skill set for sure and not necessarily compatible with other styles but why not?now go and write another! lol
I liked the way this turned dark at the end. I didn't expect that. Not bad. Not bad at all.
thanks guys, I think I'll be trying some more of these - doesn't require the same uninterrupted concentration that poetry does and which I'm not getting at the moment!
I love the description in the second paragraph, "bare legs in wellies" and "thin robins." etc.I'm not sure that flash fiction is the right genre for you, though, Sorlil.... The "flash" part, I mean! I didn't want it to end, lol....
I think you are worth following. It is 11 pm in California now on Christmas day. I know what it is like to have babies and never finish anything after 3 to 4 minutes. (I had a stop watch and checked it)Stay on it, girl.Diannemerry christmas to all, and to all a good night.
I like this. Poets tend do do well at flash fiction, maybe because we're good at expressing things in as few words as possible.Incidentally, this morning I've been watching a pair of redwings strip the berries from my holly tree. Good luck to them; they need the berries more than I do.
thanks james, I'm pleased you wanted to read more :)thanks dianne, hope you had a lovely christmas!hi colin, yes that's what I like about flash fiction it's not as word and meaning dense as poetry but much more so than short stories.
i am a bit lagging behind with my comments, i am so sorry - and now you have already removed the posts! :-) i had however managed to read The Bird Life, and was so impressed that i didn't find my words the first time - i think you have a great gift for short (very-short! :-) story, an amazing ability of condensation and gradation of tension and choosing the right, significant detail. i really think you should write more.
It's gone! I'm too slow off the mark!:)
thankyou roxana, that means a lot to mesorry, dominic, I'll try and leave them up a bit longer in future!
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