tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-28238816.post1865499031534726253..comments2024-02-24T11:28:02.310+00:00Comments on Poetry in Progress: Marion McCreadyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04657757253873577465noreply@blogger.comBlogger22125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-28238816.post-1631752678799831212010-03-14T19:45:43.640+00:002010-03-14T19:45:43.640+00:00hi michelle, thankyou, I'm glad you like it :)...hi michelle, thankyou, I'm glad you like it :)Marion McCreadyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04657757253873577465noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-28238816.post-20519066523338304692010-03-14T14:47:44.561+00:002010-03-14T14:47:44.561+00:00I echo the others, I think it's strong. I part...I echo the others, I think it's strong. I particularly love "bitter butterfly" and "citizens of the sky". Good luck with submitting it.Michellehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07747839768257543728noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-28238816.post-6790978071743793252010-03-13T22:56:55.376+00:002010-03-13T22:56:55.376+00:00thanks colin! I didn't know you could submit p...thanks colin! I didn't know you could submit poems to The Guardian.Marion McCreadyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04657757253873577465noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-28238816.post-26832999082701925762010-03-13T10:59:40.162+00:002010-03-13T10:59:40.162+00:00This is such a powerful yet subtle poem S. It dese...This is such a powerful yet subtle poem S. It deserves publication as soon as possible. I know some have suggested The Herald, but think about The Guardian too. And I'm certain Sally Evans will like it too - she's been writing on Facebook about the event.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-28238816.post-67910050581639615432010-03-12T21:39:22.801+00:002010-03-12T21:39:22.801+00:00thankyou jim, I don't know what to say...I'...thankyou jim, I don't know what to say...I'm happy that you think so!<br /><br />hi dave, thankyou :)Marion McCreadyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04657757253873577465noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-28238816.post-12259740678503943002010-03-12T11:23:06.284+00:002010-03-12T11:23:06.284+00:00I came back for a second read. I think it's ev...I came back for a second read. I think it's even better this time.Dave Kinghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08430484174826768488noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-28238816.post-21021528939387424902010-03-12T11:13:31.378+00:002010-03-12T11:13:31.378+00:00Damn fine poetry. Damn fine. I hope you got it thr...Damn fine poetry. Damn fine. I hope you got it through to the <i>Herald</i>. This needs to be read by people. I think it's the best thing I've read by you.<br /><br>Jim Murdochhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12786388638146471193noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-28238816.post-5804967890979776682010-03-12T10:11:23.195+00:002010-03-12T10:11:23.195+00:00thanks swiss, i'm glad you like it.thanks swiss, i'm glad you like it.Marion McCreadyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04657757253873577465noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-28238816.post-25945294962041692972010-03-12T07:48:55.730+00:002010-03-12T07:48:55.730+00:00i don't think you should change a thing. i lik...i don't think you should change a thing. i like the indirect feel to the speech. and 'god will catch us', thta's the line for meswisshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17924594772578153947noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-28238816.post-73886091822320390602010-03-11T22:59:17.067+00:002010-03-11T22:59:17.067+00:00thanks panther, good point, I'll give it a go....thanks panther, good point, I'll give it a go. thankyou :)<br /><br />hi s, glad you think so. so many other stories that you must know that we don't hear about.Marion McCreadyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04657757253873577465noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-28238816.post-47006268500291342122010-03-11T21:16:55.493+00:002010-03-11T21:16:55.493+00:00Touching, a reality that is powerfully sad. It was...Touching, a reality that is powerfully sad. It was bold to write about this, but very sensitively done.s*noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-28238816.post-52473269971723954202010-03-11T19:43:05.759+00:002010-03-11T19:43:05.759+00:00Sorlil, I like this. I think it's really stron...Sorlil, I like this. I think it's really strong.<br /><br /> Could I make the suggestion that the first 3 lines being 3rd-person impersonal feel odd as the rest of the poem is in the voice of the father ? Could you incorporate that beautiful nature image into the father's voice, somehow ?panthernoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-28238816.post-60384143133691563102010-03-11T09:13:51.400+00:002010-03-11T09:13:51.400+00:00thanks titus, I'm glad you think so.thanks titus, I'm glad you think so.Marion McCreadyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04657757253873577465noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-28238816.post-88977273229368605032010-03-11T00:12:40.193+00:002010-03-11T00:12:40.193+00:00In agreement with all of the above. Beautiful, ti...In agreement with all of the above. Beautiful, timely piece of writing. I particularly like the way you offset the tragedy with images of striking beauty.Titushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16380213493011623153noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-28238816.post-1997650103118447342010-03-10T16:55:06.914+00:002010-03-10T16:55:06.914+00:00thanks dave, I really appreciate that. sorry I'...thanks dave, I really appreciate that. sorry I've not been over by your way for a while - it's hard keeping up with it all!<br /><br />thanks james. such a sad story, it's been on my mind all week. glad you like those lines, wasn't sure if the frost-thumbed grass would work.Marion McCreadyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04657757253873577465noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-28238816.post-42182384436707904792010-03-10T16:14:27.611+00:002010-03-10T16:14:27.611+00:00I love this -- nothing to change, as far as I can ...I love this -- nothing to change, as far as I can see. I am deeply impressed that you can respond so quickly to these events.<br /><br />"Swallow this bitter butterfly, / let its wings expand in your throat" and "The frost-thumbed grass will cry" are my favorite lines. The frost-thumbed grass! Perfect....James Owenshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07614935078978354375noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-28238816.post-42423214278479870672010-03-10T14:55:32.916+00:002010-03-10T14:55:32.916+00:00I can't tell you how impressed I am b y this. ...I can't tell you how impressed I am b y this. I wouldn't have had the nerve to attempt that, but you've pulled it off beautifully - and I do mean beautifully.Dave Kinghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08430484174826768488noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-28238816.post-75727146215143437012010-03-10T13:54:17.665+00:002010-03-10T13:54:17.665+00:00roxana, I wrote it this morning so you know where ...roxana, I wrote it this morning so you know where the butterfly bit comes from! I didn't even notice until after I'd written it - your work lives in my unconscious mind!Marion McCreadyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04657757253873577465noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-28238816.post-17147963609423451552010-03-10T12:15:58.175+00:002010-03-10T12:15:58.175+00:00aaaah - it hits me in the chest, so powerful. it m...aaaah - it hits me in the chest, so powerful. it makes me silent. and i feel that bitter butterfly in my throat.<br /><br />very humbled.Roxanahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05650840495095863057noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-28238816.post-51816055904267434082010-03-10T12:10:41.878+00:002010-03-10T12:10:41.878+00:00Shug's your man with a hotline to the Herald!
...Shug's your man with a hotline to the Herald!<br />xRachel Foxhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11803852725693518924noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-28238816.post-14619233915360027872010-03-10T11:15:05.186+00:002010-03-10T11:15:05.186+00:00thanks rachel, I hadn't thought of that, can&#...thanks rachel, I hadn't thought of that, can't find an email address to send it to though!Marion McCreadyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04657757253873577465noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-28238816.post-73223132580757813002010-03-10T10:59:59.266+00:002010-03-10T10:59:59.266+00:00This is very strong. Maybe send it to the Herald?
...This is very strong. Maybe send it to the Herald?<br />xRachel Foxhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11803852725693518924noreply@blogger.com