tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-28238816.post2052246045196213266..comments2024-02-24T11:28:02.310+00:00Comments on Poetry in Progress: Marion McCreadyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04657757253873577465noreply@blogger.comBlogger14125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-28238816.post-11676055394604447312009-01-24T20:18:00.000+00:002009-01-24T20:18:00.000+00:00good point roxana, thanks for that and thanks dave...good point roxana, thanks for that and thanks dave, I'm glad you think so.<BR/><BR/>it's so nice that you thought of me dave, thankyou for your kind words.Marion McCreadyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04657757253873577465noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-28238816.post-51291004986568689632009-01-24T11:28:00.000+00:002009-01-24T11:28:00.000+00:00Hi Sorlil, I have taken the liberty of presenting ...Hi Sorlil,<BR/> I have taken the liberty of presenting you with The Lemonade Award. I hope this chimes happily with you and that you will feel able to accept it. Details on my blog <A HREF="http://picsandpoems.blogspot.com/" REL="nofollow">Here</A><BR/>My thanks to you for all the pleasure your blog has given me to date.<BR/>DaveDave Kinghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08430484174826768488noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-28238816.post-87617218221359667152009-01-24T10:49:00.000+00:002009-01-24T10:49:00.000+00:00I'm with Roxana. They are mysterious - and don't n...I'm with Roxana. They are mysterious - and don't necessarily need to be judged by the usual rules.Dave Kinghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08430484174826768488noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-28238816.post-65818751943807467272009-01-24T10:35:00.000+00:002009-01-24T10:35:00.000+00:00our strongest point can often become our weakness....our strongest point can often become our weakness. it all depends on how you deal with it, I believe.Roxanahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05650840495095863057noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-28238816.post-26295215918786963182009-01-23T14:49:00.000+00:002009-01-23T14:49:00.000+00:00thanks jim, I'm glad you think it's an improvement...thanks jim, I'm glad you think it's an improvement and thanks for the ideas.Marion McCreadyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04657757253873577465noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-28238816.post-42769958868624632402009-01-23T12:46:00.000+00:002009-01-23T12:46:00.000+00:00Yes, this is better. As for the comment on 'people...Yes, this is better. As for the comment on 'peopleless' I wonder if 'depopulated' might work better? Or 'barren' only that could be read as <I>never</I> having been populated. Perhaps 'now barren'?Jim Murdochhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12786388638146471193noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-28238816.post-50108063424898451692009-01-23T09:09:00.000+00:002009-01-23T09:09:00.000+00:00thankyou colin, I'm very glad you like it.thankyou colin, I'm very glad you like it.Marion McCreadyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04657757253873577465noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-28238816.post-40100769817351749722009-01-23T08:35:00.000+00:002009-01-23T08:35:00.000+00:00I like this poem very much, Sorlil. It has a gentl...I like this poem very much, Sorlil. It has a gentle feeling of truth in it, and some beautiful lines.Colin Willhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15627539650929533832noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-28238816.post-88975379870394206802009-01-22T23:41:00.000+00:002009-01-22T23:41:00.000+00:00interesting idea, deemikay, thankyou for that. I l...interesting idea, deemikay, thankyou for that. I like the 'mirror women' idea as well!Marion McCreadyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04657757253873577465noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-28238816.post-12646489980323403792009-01-22T19:50:00.000+00:002009-01-22T19:50:00.000+00:00Well, my mind is anything but great... :)I actuall...Well, my mind is anything but great... :)<BR/><BR/>I actually think this could work as two separate pieces (the second beginning at "My aunt calls me"). And the last six lines sound lovely aloud.<BR/><BR/>I still haven't done anything with my mirror women yet... maybe soon.deemikayhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01421704728979191339noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-28238816.post-59960930800361430132009-01-21T15:05:00.000+00:002009-01-21T15:05:00.000+00:00hi roxana, thankyou for that. my worry is that I'm...hi roxana, thankyou for that. my worry is that I'm not sure if I can get away with so many 'hidden narratives' or whether it's just an excuse for an underdeveloped poem.<BR/><BR/>hi deemikay, aha! great minds and that, lol!<BR/><BR/>hi frances, thanks. I appreciate your thoughts, you've give me some ideas.Marion McCreadyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04657757253873577465noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-28238816.post-84767258621232084822009-01-21T12:25:00.000+00:002009-01-21T12:25:00.000+00:00This poem really gets into its stride in the fourt...This poem really gets into its stride in the fourth stanza. The line 'my aunt calls to me etc. would make a strong beginning I feel.<BR/><BR/>I'm not sure about the 'rain-blessed tongue' and 'peopleless' islands as they feel a bit over-written. I think there's confusion about 'she' and 'I' in the first two stanzas but I agree with deemikay. Love 'mirrors of men'.Franceshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12455584448055432913noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-28238816.post-32980185867853176462009-01-21T07:11:00.000+00:002009-01-21T07:11:00.000+00:00"mirrors of men" is interesting. I had a similar ..."mirrors of men" is interesting. I had a similar thought on the train coming home last night! <BR/><BR/>It's early, I'll be back later to read properly.deemikayhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01421704728979191339noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-28238816.post-9162152066100279552009-01-20T22:51:00.000+00:002009-01-20T22:51:00.000+00:00your poems are often mysterious because they have ...your poems are often mysterious because they have this hidden narrative one cannot fully grasp... it is truly captivating, you have a gift for that.Roxanahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05650840495095863057noreply@blogger.com