Sunday, May 04, 2008

Immigrant

Immigrant

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Oceans drip
from her fingertips,

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6 comments:

swiss said...

i'm liking a lot of this - very strong. if i was to make a criticism it'd be around the assumptions the narrator makes about black women and africa. great opening lines tho

Sorlil said...

Thankyou! I'm glad you like it, I'm not sure what you mean about the assumtions, could you elaborate please?!

Dave King said...

Really great! I especially admired the first part. I think what I most admire about it is what it half says and suggests. It is a true poem, with a poem's natural ambiguity. What it says could not have been said in prose.

Sorlil said...

thanks dave, that's a really nice compliment!

swiss said...

as in if you wrote this about a european woman would it make sense?

Sorlil said...

no it wouldn't, I guess I was focusing on your point about black women and africa when I wrote with a white african woman in mind, was just wondering if you meant something in particular about black african women that came aross in the poem.