Tuesday, January 19, 2010


Oops looks like I'm in blog post overdrive at the moment!

Re-write of a poem I wrote couple of years ago on Monet's Haystacks: Snow Effect.

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10 comments:

Dianne said...

following but not blogging,
Dianne

Jim Murdoch said...

This flows well and I much prefer it to the most recent piece you just posted. That one loses me. This turns a landscape into a soundscape. I especially like the punch line at the end but then I'm a sucker for a good punch line. Very good.

Sorlil said...

sorry dianne you've lost me :)

hi jim, glad you like it, thanks.

Titus said...

With Jim on the sounds of it. Liked it, but "plumes" just jarred me slightly - because they don't look like plumes to me. Or rather, what plumes are in my mind. But that's a personal thing.

sunnydunny said...

I prefer the Alan Davie poem. To my mind this one is maybe a bit too literal as an interpretation and/or description of the painting.

Sorlil said...

thanks for that, titus! will have a rethink about plumes.

hi colin, I know what you mean, I prefer the Davie one too :) it's hard when it's a redraft of an old poem to breathe life into it.

swiss said...

i can't remember the last version enough to compare. i like all of this except 'stacked in shocks of swathes' which is just too much.

Sorlil said...

lol, you didn't like that part of the earlier version either!

Roxana said...

hey, you promised to leave the poems here a bit longer, only two days have passed and you already removed it! pleeease... :-)

though i had time to read it, but now when i had come back to comment it's gone!

Sorlil said...

I know, sorry!! it's just the competition entry date closes on fri and I wanted to email them off tonight in case I didn't get the chance to tomorrow!