One short poem, not really reading or writing much at the moment but find myself drawn back to Lorca's Blood Wedding, such an amazing read and so beautifully written!
We like short. Short is good. Not a bad wee piece. I think all you need to do to sort out the tenses is change ‘had’ to ‘have’ in the opening line. I’ve read it over several times now and that change works for me.
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Good work.
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thanks :)
the tenses aren't quite right, still trying to sort that out!
We like short. Short is good. Not a bad wee piece. I think all you need to do to sort out the tenses is change ‘had’ to ‘have’ in the opening line. I’ve read it over several times now and that change works for me.
ahh, thanks jim!
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