Friday, December 14, 2007

My first attempt at a Villanelle - a traditional poetic form. For honest man inspired by this photo on his blog!

An Aberlady Sunset

What is sky and what is river

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4 comments:

C. E. Chaffin said...

What can I do but praise your first attempt? (though the diction may be over-rich in places). By the way, I think you need "lovers" to make the verb agree. Good effort!

CE

Sorlil said...

Thanks ce, it means a lot coming from someone so adept at form! I've now changed it to lovers, thanks for pointing that out.

swiss said...

nice one! i'm rubbish at these

Sorlil said...

thankyou!