Thursday, January 10, 2008

Haystacks: Snow Effect (Monet)



poem deleted and entered into competition

7 comments:

swiss said...

nice one! i'm unsureof 'stacked in shocks' but i like'scythed, raked'. slides off the tongue. and i like the humour

swiss said...

actually, now that i've read it out loud, i'm appreciating its metricality

Sorlil said...

thankyou, I'm glad you like it!

Dick said...

This is great, sorlil, a real triumph. Fine use of alliteration & some memorable imagery - 'left to rot for art’s sake', 'hills / bandaged with snow'.

Sorlil said...

Thanks very much Dick!

An Honest Man said...

Nothing more to add. Good poem.

Sorlil said...

Thanks honest man, I appreciate it!