Wednesday, March 11, 2009

1st draft

Pebble Shores

Mists drag
their foamy nets

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8 comments:

swiss said...

poem! hurrah!

really liking reef,kelp and kernels but unconvinced by brackish beds in conjunction with them

Sorlil said...

okay thanks for that, swiss!

Roxana said...

a young romanian poet published two years ago a book of poems like a diary of her pregnacy, 'the sky in my womb'. but I like yours much more! :-) I like the subdued emotionality here, such intensity... and the connection to the sea as the womb of the world is fabulously crafted.

Sorlil said...

hi roxana, that's very nice of you to say so! I'm glad you like it, thanks.

Jim Murdoch said...

Some nice images here but I'm struggling to see ... let's not call it 'meaning' ... the story here. Who is the 'you' that shines for example? A bit too impressionistic for my tastes.

Sorlil said...

hi jim, it's my usual mash between nature images and something else, the something else here is my recent ultrasound and the 'you' is the baby.

Jim Murdoch said...

I would never have picked that up in a month of Sundays. And I know you're pregnant.

Sorlil said...

lol, maybe I ought to change the title, cheers.