"I live in you, you live in me / We are two gardens haunted by each other." 'Love Poem', Douglas Dunn
I like this. It creates the sort of expectancy one feels at the start of spring, just as trees begin to blossom. The form contributes well to that.I wonder if the opening lines could be tightened a bit, thus (forgive the impertience; I don't mean to re-write your poem):Buds fatten on blossom trees.Dead stumps sprout branches, leaves, like arms or legs growing suddenly....
thankyou, I take all the help I can get!
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