I've read this over and over but I just can't get excited over it. I agree that the 'currency of heaven' is a great image and it probably rescues the piece but there's nothing in the rest of the poem for it to connect to. Did you add that final line after you first posted it? I don't remember it being there last night. It helps.
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i was unconvinced until cherry blossoms are the currency of heaven. storming line!
Amen! Love the last line - it 'makes' the poem. And I love cherry blossoms too!
Keep up the poetry.
God Bless
Amber
Agree with swiss about the currency of heaven - what a fantastic image. And they are indeed - what would life be without them?
I've read this over and over but I just can't get excited over it. I agree that the 'currency of heaven' is a great image and it probably rescues the piece but there's nothing in the rest of the poem for it to connect to. Did you add that final line after you first posted it? I don't remember it being there last night. It helps.
thanks, everyone. I was unsure about that line, but now I'm glad I added it!
hi jim, the last line was always there.
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